“Thank you so much for your feedback, it does help so much to make the story better.”
Someone in the group posed this problem with the story:
it’s a great read…but is it really plausible that a guy who’s kepthimself for years…would loose at the first glitch to aprostitute…apart from that it was good
I thought the same thing too as I was formulating the premise of all of this. I’m an on the fly girl and problems such as Devlin being a virgin and losing it to the first girl … well that really didn’t happen that way or maybe I’m interpreting the ‘first glitch’ as something else. We know from the synopsis that Devlin’s brother has slept with his fiance’, and from the story, we know that Devlin has a lot of money, so we can guessimate that he’s a pretty smart guy and just not someone who runs off and does something like this. And as we go along with the story, you’ll see why Devlin choose Tanner, so I really can’t answer this all the way, or otherwise I’d be giving it up before you even bought me dinner, LOL. If I don’t answer that question by part 6, please remind me again, but I hope Part 4 will bring to light more of Devlin’s decision.
Next problem from another reader:
I really like it so far. There are some really hot scenes. I’m very intrigued with Devlin. I do have a question though,didn’t you write that Tanner was ebony when she came out of her room? To me that implies a darker tone of skin. Then yousaid it has an almond tone, which I think is a tad lighter than ebony. Then you say light skin, although ebony and almond are two totally different shades, I don’t consider that light. I’m just trying to get an idea of what Tanner looks like. I don’t really like stories that say the female is black, but then the hero can see her blushing everytime
And I thank you for pointing that out. I will be going over the original to find the chick’s skin color out. I’m going back to actually put in that Tanner’s shade of brown (and there’s so many darn colors of brown) is like a coffee with too much cream. The blushing in the story is important and a person of this color does present a slight flush when they are either embarrassed or turned on. Would that suffice?